New poster - an early effort
Hi everyoneI'm new here - been lurking around a little, but first time poster. I'm not much of an english scholar (i.e. no formal training in writing poetry), and I'm struggling a little with this...
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Quote:I truly wish that I could only startWith just my meagre verse to paint a sceneSo as to move your mind and touch your heartAnd then perhaps my soul may rest sereneIf I could guide my pen to...
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"Truly," "only," "just," the polysyndeton of too many "ands"--those words are merely metrical filler. More than a few unnecessary words waste syllables throughout this poem; eschew such verbiage.You...
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I agree, not bad for a first effort. Line 13: "than," not "then."Re: meagre vs. meager -- I don't know about the first spelling, perhaps a European one. But it's usually spelled meager.Margaret
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It's "meagre" over here. And what's wrong with initial caps, Owl?
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The initial caps confuse the syntax. It makes it difficult (particularly in the absence of other punctuation) to tell where one thought ends and another begins.
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This shows great promise for a first sonnet.I would conjure falling rains cleansing scenti WOULD CON jure FALL ing RAIN"S CLEANS ing SCENTI found this line difficult to read. Ditto what other's have...
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Firstly, I'd like to thank all who replied for your very constructive, not to mention reassuring, comments - it's very much appreciated!Many of you made the point about "meagre" vs. "meager" - just to...
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It's coming along nicely, Adam. When shall we see sonnet II?
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Regarding capitals, I prefer them at the beginning of each line. You are not writing prose nor is this free verse. The capitals at the beginning of the line are just formal constraints like having...
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